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A few tips from another agent

I know writing a pitch can be hard, and I want you guys to have all the help you can get. Thinking about that, I reached out to a few agents who I noticed had “this meets that” comparisons in their recent deals. One of those agents was Sarah LaPolla of Bradford Literary, who recently sold a manuscript pitched as “Easy A meets Friday Night Lights”. Because she’s been so busy lately, Sarah was unable to be a guest judge at this contest. But she did provide some good advice to those writing pitches to impress Jill Marr. So here is a short interview with her.

GabrielaIt’s interesting that you mentioned the pitch came from the editor. Sometimes authors seem to think getting an agent is the end of the road! Could you explain a bit how the pitching process works (author to agent, agent to editor, editor to publisher, so on and so forth) and how important it is to have a strong pitch in each step of the way?

Sarah LaPolla – Getting an agent is definitely not the end of the road. It’s a very important step and should absolutely be something to be proud of, but it’s only the first step toward a traditional publishing deal. The importance of a strong pitch is important because it helps me know how to sell the book to a publisher. When I receive a great query – which is one that portrays the novel in an interesting way, tells me what the book is about, and shows that the author has a firm grasp on the market they’re writing for –  it gives me a solid foundation to write a pitch letter to an editor. Sometimes I even take the author’s own lines from their query to use in my pitch.

The next step of this is getting a publisher on board. That begins with getting an editor to want the book, and usually when this happens they send it to other editors for second reads to determine how much work needs to be done and whether it’s a good fit for them as a publisher. If the editor gets support, they bring it to their publisher, who will give them the go-ahead to make an offer on the book. There are many steps after getting an agent!

Gabriela – You said you often use this-meets-that pitches. Why? What is the benefit of crafting a pitch like that? What advice would you give to authors trying to write a this-meets-that pitch? What makes it work?

Sarah – Writing a “this-meets-that” pitch is a quick and easy way to create a specific image in a reader’s mind. I like when writers use them in their queries, but only if it the two things they are choosing accurately describe their book, and are different enough from each other to seem interesting. For example, you shouldn’t say a book is “Pride and Prejudice meets Bridget Jones” because Bridget Jones is already a retelling of Pride and Prejudice.


So there you have it, guys! That’s Sarah’s advice! Do you have any other questions about pitches before the contest is launched on Monday? Let me know and I’ll try to answer them!

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This Meets That Contest Rules

I know you’ve ben craving details for this awesome new pitch contest judged by awesome agent Jill Marr, so here is the info. (If you just got into this conversation, here is the post explaining a bit of the contest, and here is the interview with awesome judge Jill Marr.)


The This Meets That Contest is a pitch contest. That means you don’t submit pages, only your pitch. It’ll be judged by agent Jill Marr. This contest is about using comparisons in your pitch. So you have to come up with a pitch that has a comparison in it (more on this below).


Anyone who has a finished manuscript or a WIP can enter (although finished manuscripts are much preferred). We’ll accept all genres, but of course, genres Jill represents are more likely to catch her eye. You should refer to the interview with Jill to see what she’s interested in.


1st place will win a critique of 50 pages from agent Jill Marr!

Amongst the others, I will choose my top three, and those people will get a 35% discount on any editing services they wish to hire! (For a list of my editing services and prices, go to Editing and Consulting.)

Jill may also request partials or fulls for the pitches she likes. So even if you don’t win first prize, you might still get a request!


Your entry should be a pitch (150 words max.) that includes a comparison. It must introduce your plot. It must state your genre. It must be under 150 words long. It must contain a comparison. Those are the rules.

What sort of comparison? It can be a “this meets that” kind of thing, like “Princess Diaries meets Sex and the City” (okay, that sounds odd); or it can be a simpler comparison, like “it’s similar in tone to Jonathan Tropper’s work” or “would appeal to Harry Potter fans” (although you should try to be a bit more original than that). The point is to present your manuscript and use a comparison to published books, movies or TV shows to help the agent understand your story. Of course, you shouldn’t have just the comparison. You have 150 words, use them to introduce your manuscript, like you would in a query. Just make sure there’s a comparison somewhere in that.

Oh, and the personalization part of the query, or the part about your bio, can be cut. For a pitch, focus on the story. Think of it as an elevator pitch.


Next Monday, September 2nd. Jill is a very busy lady, so, unfortunately, she will only read 20 entries. That is why I’ll open two submission slots, and will accept the first ten I get on each of them. Slot one will be on Monday, Sept. 2nd, from 8 am to 1 pm US Eastern Time. Slot two will be on Monday, September 2nd, from 6pm to 10 pm US Eastern Time. The first ten entries received on the each time slot will be in. If we don’t reach 10 entries on Monday, I’ll open extra slots on Tuesday. DON’T SEND YOU ENTRY OUTSIDE THOSE SLOTS! ONLY ENTRIES SENT WITHIN THOSE PERIODS WILL BE CONSIDERED.


  1. Subscribe to the website on the sidebar widget here.
  2. Wait for the submission slots.
  3. When we’re open for submissions, send it to formatted like this:


Body of the email: A pitch of 150 words or less, that describes your manuscript and includes an original comparison.

Easy, right? If you have questions, fire away in the comments. I’m excited about this one!

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An interview with judge Jill Marr

You already know the This Meets That Contest is coming in September, and that you’ll need a pitch with a good comparison to convince our agent judge to request your manuscript. Now it’s time to get to know a little bit about our very awesome judge Jill Marr and what she’s looking for in those pitches.


Jill is an agent at the Sandra Djikstra Literary Agency and has nearly 15 years of experience in publishing. She has kindly agreed to judge this contest and offer a critique of the first 50 pages of the lucky winner’s manuscript! Jill considers these pitches using comparisons a “GREAT way to pitch your book if you have very limited time—for that dreaded elevator pitch, it is perfect. It sets a mood.” She definitely knows what she’s talking about, guys!

Here are Jill’s interests: mysteries, horror and thrillers, women’s fiction, book club/commercial fiction and any nonfiction. A more detailed description from the agency’s website: “Jill is interested in commercial fiction, with an emphasis on mysteries, thrillers and horror, women’s commercial fiction and historical fiction. She is also looking for nonfiction by authors who are getting their work published regularly in magazines and who have a realistic sense of the market and their audience. Jill is looking for nonfiction projects in the areas of self-help, inspirational, cookbooks, memoir (she especially loves travel and foodie memoirs), health & nutrition, pop culture, humor and music.”

Jill will be accepting pitches for all of the genres above, so if those are your genres, this is the contest for you!

To help everyone entering the contest, I asked Jill a few questions about using comparisons in pitches. Here’s what she said!

Gabriela: So, let’s start with the importance of this. How important is it for authors to compare their manuscripts to published books in their queries? Is it a big plus, or doesn’t make that big of a difference? And why is it important? Why do you need this sort of comparison?

Jill Marr: It’s really not that important unless you have something to compare to that truly fits. For agents it can be dangerous. Calling something “the next The Help” can really raise the bar and set some expectations that, if not met, will be disappointing. So it’s important not to oversell.

G: Is a comparison for everyone? Should all authors be able to tell you their manuscript is “this meets that”?

JM: I think it’s very important for authors to know where their book would fit in the bookstore, so it’s a good exercise for authors, for sure. It’s also a really GREAT way to pitch your book if you have very limited time—for that dreaded elevator pitch, it is perfect. It sets a mood.

G: You recently sold a book that was pitched as “MUST LOVE DOGS meets JUNO.” Was that a comparison the author made when she pitched it to you, or something you came up with when you were pitching to editors? What works in that pitch?

JM: The author actually came to me with this one and it worked so well we ran with it. Her book, which we’re tentatively calling The Shoplifter’s Guide to Finding Love, is set in part, in a dog park (hence the Must Love Dogs reference) where the local AA meetings take place, and there is all kinds of dysfunction like one of the characters is a compulsive shoplifter, etc. So the Juno nod works as well.

G: When coming up with a comparison to describe their manuscript, what should authors aim for? What makes a great “this meets that” pitch?

JM: I always like to hear comparisons that mash up a book and a movie. Often movies will make it more visual for people. But don’t force it. Just use the comparison if it works.

G: A good comparison can make all the difference in a pitch. It can make it intriguing. But a bad comparison can ruin a query. I see it on Twitter all the time, agents commenting on ridiculous comparisons they found on queries. What makes it an awful one? Any major pet peeves, anything authors should definitely be avoiding when trying to compare their manuscripts to something else?

JM: If the two films or novels are so diametrically opposed it would be weird. I love Fight Club and I love Driving Miss Daisy but I don’t want to read Fight Club meets Driving Miss Daisy. Also, try not to compare your book to the hottest thing out there (I’ve done it so I’m guilty but I’m saying here that it’s probably not the best idea). For a while it felt like all I was reading was pitches for the next Eat, Pray, Love (Ugh, I only got through the “Eat” section of the book so that comparison always fell flat for me, anyway) . And if you are funny you are not necessarily the next David Sedaris and if you are creepy you are not the next Stephen King.

G: What works best in a comparison: mentioning bestsellers in that genre or books that aren’t as widely known?

JM: Why bother? If people don’t know what you are comparing to it’ll fall flat. I’d try to find something mid-range so it’s not the hottest book out there at the moment but it’s not totally random and unknown, either.

G: What about using movies in pitches? I’ve seen many books sold with pitches involving movies (like Juno!) or TV shows. But I’ve also seen agents complaining about authors comparing their manuscripts only to movies and not listing any books. What is the rule? Is it okay to compare a manuscript to movies? Is it better to be able to throw a book in the mix, or is it okay to mention just films and TV shows?

JM: There are no rules—it’s all good and TV shows work. I’d love to see a pitch comparing a project to Mad Men!

G: Is there a match you’ve been dying to see? A “this meets that” you desperately want someone to write?

JM: That’s a great question and something that I’d really have to think about. I’d love to see Gone Girl meets Casablanca. Hey, you never know!

So there you have it, guys! The details on how to enter the contest will be posted on Monday, August 26th. The actual contest will open for entries a week later, on Monday, Sept. 2nd. So stay tuned and start thinking of what you can compare your manuscript to!

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The “This Meets That” Contest

You might remember that, a while ago, back on the old website, I mentioned this very cool contest with a very cool judge. Well, the new website is up, the very cool judge has opened a slot on her schedule just for us and the contest is happening!!!

So here is what this is. We talk a lot about queries here. And comparisons are often important in queries. Why? Because the point of your query is to show the agent what your manuscript is like. And comparisons are exactly that: my novel is like this, with a little dash of that. When well done, they paint a good picture. That’s why they’re often used by agents when pitching manuscripts to editors, and that’s why they’re often the thing that catches an agent’s eye in a query.

But we’ve all heard the horror stories. We see on Twitter all the times, agents saying “please stop comparing your novel to that,” or “NEVER say you’re the next J.K. Rowling!” So, how do you use comparison without scaring the agent away?

Throughout the next few weeks, I’ll post tips on how to do just that. And in September…*drumroll*…we’ll have a contest judged by the very awesome agent   Jill Marr of the Sandra Djikstra Literary Agency! You will get to send Jill your pitch (including a very awesome comparison, of course) and she’ll choose what to request!

Details on the contest will come soon. But here’s what you can start doing NOW: to enter the contest, you must subscribe to the new website using the button on the toolbar on the right (well, it’s a new website, and I want followers!). But do it quick! Because the first 15 people who subscribe to the new website get a comment from me on their contest entries BEFORE they’re entered in the contest! (Mind you, not and edit or a rewrite, just a comment, ok?) Jill will not know who got comments from me and those people will be given no unfair advantages, of course. But a fresh perspective is always good, right? So subscribe now!

More tips, details and opportunities to win great prizes are coming soon. For now, subscribe so you can know when the good stuff is coming! And start thinking about that pitch!

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